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Don’t get caught here
Hold your breath.
Hide the body
There was no death

Feed the dog
Conceal the gun.
Wash your hands
Yes, We had fun.

Put on your makeup
Disperse your fear
Hide his limbs.
He wasn't here.

Remove his pillow
Now go to bed
There was no murder
He isn’t dead.
©2004-2009 ~lesseroflindsey
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Submitted: March 10, 2004
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haha this sucks. It rythms, which i am bad at. This is a very immature poem. very immature. the kind i wrote when I was 11. :|
i hate it
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HOLY SHIT! You are the greatest EVER. The short lines and all gives it the perfect pace and it also adds onto the feeling of trying to hide something. Do I make sense? I hope so...This is one of your best and I don't find it immature at all. I envy your abilities to write something this great. Anyway, down to the point... Amazing x6489 job! This is going on my favourites :D

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"Left behind, erased from time, ain't no decency in being boxed up alive. Look around, ain't no R.I.P. signs here. We don't rest in peace ... we just disappear." -- The Distillers
i really like it, and i think the rhyme/rythem makes it seem kind of dreamy and very innocent...good job.

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.carolyn.
awesome..i like rhyming..
aww lindsey its so good...
you give the nicest comments a person can ever give. Thank you so much Megan. I really really appreciate it. a lot.. a ton!
:) i'm glad to have you as a friend.

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I will write you like a book.
LINDSEY!! it made my mouth go like this.. O... it is soo amazing.. you are sooooo awesome!! i dont see why you think its bad.. it is soo good.. wow.. i just love it.. you are my all time favorite poet.. OF ALL TIME!! :D im favouriting this.. I LOVE YOU!

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why are you trying so hard to fit in and be the same, when God wants you to be different, thats why he put you on this earth
Thats fuckin awesome!
i dont care if you say its immature, its cool
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enough said:P

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If I had stealth enough to sneak, Around your house, I’d turn your bed sheets inside out
BAH! you were eleven?!?!? whoa, those are some really eloquent passages for an eleven year old, well done

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